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Overall, cricket was the most popular sport by far, while hockey is the lest. Cricket had around 80%, which is the highest. Football was second at about 40%, and badminton was little lower at near 30%. Hockey had only 10%, the smalest.
Looking more detail, cricket bar is blue and very tall, two times higher then football green bar. Badminton orange bar is shorter then football but longer then hockey red bar. No other sports showed in the chart. The survey was did in 2023 and show indian people prefer cricket most.
In summary, there is big gap betwen cricket and others sports in India
TA
Task Achievement
5.0
CC
Coherence & Cohesion
5.0
LC
Lexical Resource
5.0
GRA
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
5.0
Task Achievement
5.0Strengths
- Mentions all four sports with approximate percentages
- Clearly states cricket is most popular and hockey the least
Areas to Improve
- Overview is short and could highlight more comparisons
- Some sentences repeat similar ideas instead of adding new information
Coherence & Cohesion
5.0Strengths
- Has an introduction, overview, detail paragraph and summary
Areas to Improve
- Boundaries between overview and details are not clear
- Linking words are basic and sometimes missing
- Unnecessary information about bar colours does not help progression
Lexical Resource
5.0Strengths
- Uses some appropriate vocabulary: survey, percentages, popular, gap
- Attempts paraphrases like 'the most popular sport by far'
Areas to Improve
- Frequent repetition of simple words (sport, show, most)
- Inaccurate word forms: lest, smalest
- Awkward phrases: 'the survey was did', 'looking more detail'
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
5.0Strengths
- Uses a mix of simple and a few more complex sentences
- Meaning is still clear despite errors
Areas to Improve
- Regular errors with verb forms, articles, and comparatives
- Errors like 'hockey is the lest', 'shorter then football', 'was did'
- More accurate control of tense and sentence structure needed
Grammar Feedback - Key Patterns to Fix
Original: The chart show sports preferences in India from a 2023 survey.
Correct: The chart shows sports preferences in India based on a 2023 survey.
Explanation: Third person singular needs 'shows'; 'based on' is the standard phrase.
Example: The chart shows a clear trend over the period.
Original: It give percentages of people who like different sports.
Correct: It gives the percentages of people who prefer different sports, namely cricket, football, badminton and hockey.
Explanation: Use 'gives' and 'prefer' for more formal, accurate description.
Example: The table gives information about household spending.
Original: Overall, cricket was the most popular sport by far, while hockey is the lest.
Correct: Overall, cricket was by far the most popular sport, whereas hockey was the least popular.
Explanation: Keep the same tense and correct comparative form 'least'.
Example: Walking was the least common activity among all age groups.
Original: Football was second at about 40%, and badminton was little lower at near 30%.
Correct: Football was the second most popular at about 40%, and badminton was a little lower at nearly 30%.
Explanation: Add article 'the', and use 'a little' and 'nearly' with percentages.
Example: The figure for gas was a little lower at nearly 25%.
Original: Hockey had only 10%, the smalest.
Correct: Hockey accounted for only 10%, the smallest share.
Explanation: 'Accounted for' is a common verb for percentages; correct spelling of 'smallest'.
Example: Rail travel accounted for the smallest proportion of journeys.
Original: The survey was did in 2023 and show indian people prefer cricket most.
Correct: The survey was conducted in 2023 and shows that Indian people prefer cricket the most.
Explanation: Use passive 'was conducted' and capitalise 'Indian'.
Example: The research was conducted across five major cities.
Original: In summary, there is big gap betwen cricket and others sports in India
Correct: In summary, there is a large gap between cricket and the other sports in India.
Explanation: Add article 'a', correct spelling, and use 'the other sports'.
Example: There is a significant gap between the highest and lowest figures.
Vocabulary Upgrades - Say It Like Band 7+
Basic: The chart show… / It give percentages…
Better Alternatives: illustrates, shows, compares, presents, gives information about
Example: The bar chart illustrates the percentages of respondents who prefer four sports in India in 2023.
Basic: had around 80% / had only 10%
Better Alternatives: accounts for, makes up, represents — plus: proportion, share, figure
Example: Cricket accounts for about 75% of respondents. Hockey accounts for only about 10%, the smallest share.
Basic: most popular / second / smallest
Better Alternatives: dominant, second most popular, least favoured, enjoys limited popularity
Example: Cricket is by far the dominant sport. Hockey is the least favoured sport.
Basic: two times higher then / little lower at near 30%
Better Alternatives: twice as popular as, slightly lower, considerably higher, far less popular
Example: Cricket is about twice as popular as football. Badminton's figure is slightly lower than that for football.
Basic: The survey was did in 2023 and show indian people…
Better Alternatives: was conducted in, respondents, people surveyed, Indian people
Example: The survey was conducted in 2023 and shows that Indian people prefer cricket the most.
Basic: lest, smalest, betwen, like… like…
Better Alternatives: least, smallest, between — use 'such as' or 'namely' instead of repeating 'like'
Example: Sports such as cricket, football, badminton and hockey were included in the survey.
Next steps for you
Write a sharper overview
After the introduction, give 1–2 sentences summarising the biggest patterns, for example, 'Cricket dominates, while hockey is far less popular.'
Group related items
Put football and badminton together in one paragraph as 'middle-ranking sports' instead of describing each sentence separately.
Avoid unnecessary visual details
Do not describe bar colours; focus on numbers and comparisons (percentages, 'twice as high', 'smallest share').
Use accurate verbs for data
Practise phrases like 'X accounts for Y%', 'X is the most/least popular', 'X is roughly twice as high as Y'.
Upgrade comparative structures
Use forms such as 'twice as high as', 'slightly lower than', 'far more popular than' instead of 'two times higher then'.
Check verb tense and agreement
For charts from one year, use present simple with correct forms, e.g., 'The chart shows…', 'Cricket is…', 'Hockey has…'.
Improve word forms and spelling
Learn correct forms such as 'least', 'smallest', 'between', and always capitalise country adjectives like 'Indian'.
Avoid repetition of simple words
Replace repeated 'like' with 'such as' or 'namely'; use 'preferences', 'popularity', 'proportion' instead of repeating 'sport' and 'people like'.
Build safer complex sentences
Join related ideas with 'while', 'whereas', or 'in contrast', for example, 'Cricket is extremely popular, whereas hockey attracts very few fans.'
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Examiner's Comments
You have clearly understood the chart and successfully identified the main point that cricket is much more popular than the other sports. Your figures are generally accurate and you already use some useful academic phrases such as 'most popular' and 'in summary'. By focusing on a stronger overview, clearer grouping of information, and careful checking of grammar and spelling, you can move your writing into the Band 6 range and beyond. Keep practising with similar charts, and try to apply the correction patterns from this feedback in your next answer.
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