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Environmental issues have become a important concern for governments and society in recent years. Some people say that increasing the price of fuel is the best solution to reduce carbon emissions and encourage people to use alternative energy. However, I think this method alone is not enough and can cause negative economic problems. A more complete approach is needed to solve environmental problems effectively.
Raising fuel prices can discourage peoples from using private cars, but it create problems for low-income families. Many peoples depend on fuel for going to work or transporting goods, specially in areas where there is no good public transport system. As a result, higher fuel costs may increase living costs without really reduce emissions, which is unfair for poor people.
A more better solution is to increase public education about the environment. When peoples understand how their daily choices affect the environment, they are more likely to change their behaviour and do things like saving energy, recycling, and reducing unnecessary buying. Education can create long-term changes because peoples feel responsible, not just because they have to pay more money.
Technology is also very important for reducing carbon emissions. Governments should invest in renewable energy like solar and wind power, and they should help developing electric vehicles. When alternative energy become more cheaper and easy to get, more peoples will use them.
Finally, the government must have stronger rules for industrial pollution. Big companies produce a lot of emissions, and if the government make them follow environmental standards, it will help reduce the problem.
In conclusion, although raising fuel prices may help a little bit, a better way is to combine education, new technology, and stronger government rules. This approach is much more effective than just making fuel more expensive.
TR
Task Response
6.0
CC
Coherence & Cohesion
6.0
LC
Lexical Resource
6.0
GRA
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
6.0
Task Response
6.0Strengths
- Clear position throughout the response
- Main ideas are relevant
Areas to Improve
- Some supporting ideas lack depth
- Conclusion is a bit repetitive
Coherence & Cohesion
6.0Strengths
- Clear paragraphing
- Logical progression of ideas
Areas to Improve
- Overuse of 'Firstly', 'Secondly'
- Referencing could be clearer in paragraph 2
Lexical Resource
6.0Strengths
- Clear position throughout the response
- Main ideas are relevant
Areas to Improve
- Some supporting ideas lack depth
- Conclusion is a bit repetitive
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
6.0Strengths
- Clear paragraphing
- Logical progression of ideas
Areas to Improve
- Overuse of 'Firstly', 'Secondly'
- Referencing could be clearer in paragraph 2
Grammar Feedback - Key Patterns to Fix
Original: He go to the store.
Correct: He goes to the store.
Explanation: Third-person singular verbs in the present simple tense require an '-s' ending.
Example: She writes excellent essays.
Original: The data is collected by them.
Correct: The data are collected by them.
Explanation: 'Data' is a plural noun, so it requires a plural verb.
Example: The criteria are clearly defined.
Original: Despite of the challenges, they succeeded.
Correct: Despite the challenges, they succeeded.
Explanation: 'Despite' does not take 'of'. Use 'in spite of' if 'of' is needed.
Example: In spite of the rain, the event was a success.
Vocabulary Upgrades - Say It Like Band 7+
Basic: Good
Better Alternatives: excellent, commendable, proficient, advantageous
Example: The student presented an excellent argument.
Basic: Important
Better Alternatives: crucial, significant, vital, paramount
Example: Time management is crucial for exam success.
Basic: Think
Better Alternatives: consider, believe, argue, maintain
Example: Many experts argue that practice is essential.
Basic: Good
Better Alternatives: excellent, commendable, proficient, advantageous
Example: The student presented an excellent argument.
Next steps for you
Balance both sides more evenly
Make sure each body paragraph has a similar level of detail and at least one clear example.
Watch small grammar slips
Review patterns like "start learning", article use ("a/an/the"), and adjective forms ("confused").
Keep upgrading key phrases
Create your own list of stronger alternatives (e.g., "very beneficial" → "highly beneficial") and use them in the next 3 essays.
Aim for consistency
You are already at a solid Band 7 level. Focus on reducing small mistakes, not changing your whole style.
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